Children are ingenuous and playful. They are always curious about everything that exists in the world. Also, they are very honest in their feelings. They laugh and smile when they feel happy but when they feel scared or sad, they burst into tears. Even sometimes they walk on eggshells not to be scolded. These two photographs are showing this feature very well. One is taken by Margaret Bourke-White and is named "Village School". The other one is "Children's Puppet Theatre, Paris 1963" taken by Alfred Eisenstadt. Children in these two photographs are different in that they are under different circumstances which make children hide or reveal their emotions.
Let's take a look at "Village School" first. The room is dark and boys are sitting in rows. There is nothing special in there but only simple dark-colored desks. Some of the boys are staring at the photographer maybe because they feel nervous about the stranger or just they were asked to do that for taking that photograph. Most of them look very serious due to rigid facial expressions. However, one boy in the front seems to slightly smile. He might think being a subject of photograph is interesting. Meanwhile, some of other boys are looking at another point. There might be their strict teacher ordering them to stay calm. But all of them have something in common. They hide their emotions and try to be patient. They might think about what to do after school such as playing soccer or eating.
Now, what about "Children's Puppet Theatre"? Children look surprised, excited and funny. The photograph looks bright and clear so that children's faces and actions are well seen. Each child expresses exactly what he or she wants. For example, the boy in the center is pointing his finger up high and screaming. He may be shouting enthusiastically "Go! Go!" for what he is watching now. The girl in front of that boy also seems excited just as much as the boy feels. The girl has her mouth open widely and shakes her left hand which is blurred due to its motion. The boy on the left blocks his ears because the sound is too loud for him. The girl behind that boy is covering her mouth shutting eyes tight in order to not to watch. The children in this photograph do reveal their emotions directly unlike those in the former photograph.
These two photographs are similar in that they both focus on children but very different in many factors. First, the atmosphere of the former one is dark, calm and bit suppressed but in the latter one, it is active, bright and exciting. This is because of the difference in lights and positions of children. Regular rows in the first photograph describe strict and harsh orders, but irregular positions in the second photograph show freedom. Moreover, angle is also a big difference. In the former photograph, it is taken at high angle looking down on children. It seems like the photographer overlooks and monitors on them. On the other hand, the latter one is taken at the children's standing eye level. In my opinion, it is a more friendly approach for children taking at children's height.
Although the topic of both photographs is children but they show different moods of them. In "Village School", children seem to be forced to sit still and not to do anything but in "Children's Puppet Theatre", children have no restriction to express their feelings. The contrast of mood, pressures and freedom, is depicted through children's faces and actions. But it is clear that they are all children who want to run outside and play with their friends.
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ReplyDeleteFirst, I like your introduction. I like that you started with details about children which I thought very interesting. Also, your body paragraphs are very descriptive and show exactly how you think about the photographs. Moreover, I like that you featured about the angles taken in these photographs in the third body paragraph. I never though of them so they totally drew my attention. There was nothing I coudn't understand. I just thought about changing the sentence "children have no restriction to express their feelings" into "children are allowed to express their feelings freely."
I think your writing is very good and very interesting. I really enjoyed reading it!
Your 3rd body paragraph seems like it's concluding your essay so if you could, it would be better to divide the 'many factors' and detail them. If you can't, you may need to change the word 'many' into a certain number like two or three. And I feel that your conclusion is weak, far weaker than the 3rd body paragraph so you'd rather rearrange the sentences in the 3rd body paragraph and conclusion to make your conclusion stronger.
ReplyDeleteAt first, your essay is clear to understand and well organized. So your point seems to be understandable and clear. Nice easay i think. And you separated the two pictures in body 2 and body 3, it makes your idea more reliable.
ReplyDeleteHowever, if you correct your hook sentence more interesting, it would be better. Anyways i enjoyed your essay though:)
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ReplyDeleteChildren at age of seven are often called ‘little devil’ because they are so playful and prankful. They are always curious about everything that exists in the world. Meanwhile, they are very honest in their feelings. They laugh and smile when they feel happy but whenever they feel scared or sad, they soon burst into tears. Even sometimes they walk on eggshells not to be scolded. These two photographs are showing these features very well. One is taken by Margaret Bourke-White and is named “Village School”. The other one is “Children’s Puppet Theatre, Paris 1963” taken by Alfred Eisenstadt. Children in these two photographs are different in that they are under different circumstances which make children hide or reveal their emotions.
Let’s take a look at “Village School” first. The room is dark and boys are sitting in rows. There is nothing special in there but only simple dark-colored desks. Some of the boys are staring at the photographer maybe because they feel nervous about the stranger or just they were asked to do that for taking that photograph. Most of them look very serious due to rigid facial expressions. However, one boy in the front seems to slightly smile. He might think being a subject of photograph is interesting. Meanwhile, some of other boys are looking at another point. There might be their strict teacher ordering them to stay calm. But all of them have something in common. They hide their emotions and try to be patient. They might think about what to do after school such as playing soccer or eating.
Now, what about “Children’s Puppet Theatre”? Children look surprised, excited and funny. The photograph looks bright and clear so that children’s faces and actions are well seen. Each child expresses exactly what he or she wants. For example, the boy in the center is pointing his finger up high and screaming. He may be shouting enthusiastically “Go! Go!” for what he is watching now. The girl in front of that boy also seems excited just as much as the boy feels. The girl has her mouth open widely and shakes her left hand which is blurred due to its motion. The boy on the left blocks his ears because the sound is too loud for him. The girl behind that boy is covering her mouth shutting eyes tight in order to not to watch. The children in this photograph do reveal their emotions directly unlike those in the former photograph.
These two photographs are similar in that they both focus on children but very different in two factors. First, the atmosphere of the former one is dark, calm and bit suppressed but in the latter one, it is active, bright and exciting. This is because of the difference in lights and positions of children. Regular rows in the first photograph describe strict and harsh orders, but irregular positions in the second photograph show freedom. Moreover, angle is also a big difference. In the former photograph, it is taken at high angle looking down on children. It seems like the photographer overlooks and monitors on them. On the other hand, the latter one is taken at the children’s standing eye level. In my opinion, it is a more friendly approach for children taking at children’s height.
Although the topic of both photographs is children but they show different moods of them. In “Village School”, children seem to be forced to sit still and not to do anything but in “Children’s Puppet Theatre”, children have no restriction that blocks their expression of feelings. The contrast of mood - pressures and freedom - is depicted through children’s faces and actions. But it is clear that they are all just children who want to run outside and play with their friends.