Many children are still adopting to elsewhere. Though their birth parents are in distress, but they send their boys and girls abroad because of their poor financial and social problems. After the children grow up, they`re trying to find out their birth parents. Through some of ways, they finally meet and embrace each other. When it televise, audiences are crying together because of their tears. Today, it is not difficult for adopted people to find out their birth family by using advanced information technologies. But some people are concerning about it because it might make some side-effects. In spite of the worries, I think finding out birth parents would give much more benefits to adopted children.
My first reason is that they could set a pride by finding their lineage. It is important for people to know own root and culture, but most of adopted children have lack of this, especially who adopted to overseas. Though they have lived on different cultural backgrounds, they can get self-confidence when they understand reasons why they have to adopt. Furthermore, they can remedy feels of deprivation and accept their circumstances by understanding their mother country.
And they can support their birth parents in many ways. Most of parents who adopted out their children were poor, and they are still in poor condition. Although they have lived far away for a long time, the parents can serve as good father and mother to their returned children, and the child also support them. In the long term, the financial supporting can reduce another adoption, which is the most tragic affair in the world.
Moreover, it can make a healthy adoption system. In these days, many cases of illegal children abandonment are still happening, and they`ll live with these sorrows. The healthy adoption can keep away from these tragedy. By formulating the parents search system, they can maintain a blood connection, and it also make responsibilities to both parents. Finally, the cases of open adoptions will increase through the system.
Thus, finding out birth parents gives them a lot of positive things. They can have a self-confidence, support their birth parents and even set a good precedents. As the adoption is not considered as taboos nowadays, there are no reasons to ban a confirmation of their root. For both of them, finding their families must keep on.
First of all, I enjoyed your writing!
ReplyDeleteI see you chose the different topic. It was interesting.
In the introduction, I think it's better to remove 'but' in the second sentence and change 'when it televise' to other words like 'on television.'
I can't really understand the second body paragraph.I don't quite get the idea that supporting birth parents can be the reason why adopted people try to find them. Maybe you can explain more about this and make it understandable by putting more details.
Except some mistakes related to grammer and words, I think you did a great job. I mean, this is a timed writing and first draft, isn't it? Thanks for sharing your essay.
Since i wrote my writing about the same topic, i can understand your writing. I totally agree with you on the self-confident thing.
ReplyDelete" When it televise, audiences are crying together because of their tears." I do not think this sentence makes sense.
I don't understand quite about the sentence "Although they have lived far away for a long time, the parents can serve as good father and mother to their returned children, and the child also support them" It would be better if you explain clearly.
Many children are still adopting to elsewhere. Though their birth parents are in distress, they send their boys and girls abroad because of their poor financial situations and other problems. After the children grow up, they`re trying to find out their birth parents. Through some of ways, they finally meet and embrace each other. When they meet finally, they`re crying together because of their sorrows. Today, it is not difficult for adopted people to find out their birth family by using advanced information technologies. But some people are concerning about it because it might make some side-effects. In spite of some worries, I think finding out birth parents would give much more benefits to adopted children.
ReplyDeleteMy first reason is that they could set a pride by finding their lineage. It is important for people to know own root and culture, but most of adopted children have lack of this, especially who adopted to overseas. Though they have lived on different cultural backgrounds, they can get self-confidence when they understand reasons why they have to adopt. Furthermore, they can remedy feels of deprivation and accept their circumstances by understanding their mother country.
And they can support their birth parents in many ways. Most of parents who adopted out their children were poor, and they are still in poor condition. Although they have lived far away for a long time, blood relations is still important. When they meets again, the parents can serve as good father and mother to their returned children, and the child also support them. In the long term, the financial supporting can reduce another adoption, which is the most tragic affair in the world.
Moreover, it can make a healthy adoption system. In these days, many cases of illegal children abandonment are still happening, and they`ll live with these sorrows. The healthy adoption can keep away from these tragedy. By formulating the parents search system, they can maintain a blood connection, and it also make responsibilities to both parents. Finally, the cases of open adoptions will increase through the system.
Thus, finding out birth parents gives them a lot of positive things. They can have a self-confidence, support their birth parents and even set a good precedents to make better laws. Since adoption is not considered as taboos nowadays, there are no reasons to ban a confirmation of their root. For both of them, finding their families must keep on.