Sharing files online – it's legal, yes.
Thepiratebay, Megaupload, 4shared – these are ones of the file-sharing pages. There are various movie sharing, music sharing, electronic document sharing pages on the internet and it's not even hard for us to find if we google the titles of the materials we want to get. Like this, even if there exist numerous files sharers, the governments announce that it's still illegal to upload and download files. By now you must have a question in your head, 'Is it supposed to be illegal?' My answer is no and here's why.
First, it can be reproduced without additional costs once you make the original first. What you all need is copying the file and pasting it. It's literally infinite, like the clones you may have seen in the movie 'Matrix'. If you charge for the copied files, you can basically make infinite amount of money, but since it's not illegal to copy books and to borrow books from the library, I suppose that this issue in this regard.
Second, the producers of the very subject can get more famous. Nobody hates money. So the contributors to the materials that are shared on the internet would be furious when they actually see their products distributed for free. However, they can also make money by filming advertisements, being on TV shows, etc. To do this, it's prerequisite to be famous first. By filesharing, celebrities will be more popular as long as what they make is decently good. Eventually filesharers help them get more income.
Last, there are a lot more for police department to do than catching those who share files. They need to set their eye on 'actual' crimes such as fraud, violence, homicide, narcotics and so forth. Filesharing itself doesn't damage anyone. Instead, as I mentioned in the second body paragraph, it will be beneficial to the people concerned. The police should loosen their handcuffs to filesharers and put their guns on the real criminals' head.
Those three above are the reasons why I'm pro-filesharing. It's not stealing money from the manufacturer but give them more benefits, and the government should not waste their money on blocking the passage to the good end. I don't think people will simply change their mind, but as time goes by, they will realize what's right and happily accept it.
Although I've never heard, I loved how you started your writing by suggesting the names of some famous filesharing sites! It was really an eye-catcher.
ReplyDeleteYour main point seems to be filesharing is legal, and it's also good for the people who made files because filesharing is a great opportunity to advertise their works.
As I mentioned earlier, these three names of filesharing sites--Thepiratebay, Megaupload, 4shared--struck me powerfully.
Everything was clear to me.
If I can help you writing your second draft, I have two suggestions for you.
First of all, your thesis statement seems to be "My answer is no and here's why." It will be better if you strengthen your thesis statement with some details about your writing. Maybe you can add a summary of your topic as well as a brief summary of your reasons.
And, in your third paragraph, if I'm right, you're saying that since the police is busy dealing with other things, they should ignore trivial things such as downloading files. You also wrote "Filesharing itself doesn't damage anyone." Please don't misunderstand me, because I'm not trying to offend you, but I think this argument is very likely to raise others' oppositions. Others could think like "Filesharing DOES harm others by depriving their right to receive rightful money about their work, and it cannot be legal just because the police is too busy." So it seems that it will be much better if you give another argument to support your topic.
Overall, I enjoyed your writing, since it gave me lots of things to think about!
I enjoy reading your writing.
ReplyDeleteThe main point of the writing(Sharing files online is legal) is clear
and all the sentences are easy to understand.
Especially, I like your introduction part because you put names of some file-sharing website on the hook. This idea is good.
How about change the words 'first second last' to other phrases?
I think phrase like Most of all, in addition will make your writing better.
Seunghyun Lee
As many classmates mentioned above, I also like your hook sentence. Your hook was really simple and clear to catch readers' attention.
ReplyDeleteAlso, overall, your essay was really well-organized and easy to understand. However, if you suggested more specific details, it would be more persuasive essay. for example, you mentioned sharing files are not harmful to anyone, but it is half true...if you mentioned music producers or movie directors who have lisenses, it would be nice. anyways, it was nice essay, i enjoyed it!