Everyone in our big world gets stress at least one time during the day. There can be a huge variety of reasons to get the stress; for instance spilling a coffee on the favorite shit, being late on class, job, meeting, getting wet under the rain and so on and so on and so on. Today stress is a big issue in the big world, where everyone gets it.
The first and one of the most essential reasons to be stressed is the lack of the money. The modern system of life is based on the "piece of paper" and if you do not have it or if you have it but not enough. It for sure results the stress. According to the US school of the international studies' research, there are 40% of the people are stressed when they wake up every morning and realize how little money they have in the pocket. Therefore they are stressed if they have less than their neighbors. As we can see the lack of money is a big reason for getting stress.
Another reason to be stressed is the choice which can affect the future. The right choice can bring a lot of happiness, but the wrong choice can lead to the infinite stress till your soul goes to the heaven. The high school students are stressed of the choice of their future university and major. After entering the university they begin to be stressed by asking themselves "Is it the major which suits for me? Is it the major which I will enjoy and with help of which I will be able to earn enough?" Then the graduation comes and not only, because the choice of the company comes too. Students become stressed because of the company's atmosphere, boss's attitude and staff relationship and so on. And this consequence of the life which results stress is an infinite.
The relationship can lead to the stress too. In some cases when people want to create a new relationship in the society it makes them sometimes do things they do not like to ( laugh at jokes they do not understand, eat food they have allergy from…) all these for sure causes stress. Especially if the relationship within family members is tied is a cause of the stress. On the one hand they are the closest people for you in this world, but on the another hand if they do not understand your needs which leads to the misunderstanding all these can result the stress. Bad relationship can cause the stress.
So everyone has experienced the stress on his or her own skin in this big world. And there are a huge amount of reasons the stress to occur. Despite all the causes of the stress people should learn how to be peaceful in the mind because such approach will help to reduce the level of stress and the big world which is full of the stressful situations would be seen as calm and harmonic place.
I think your reasons seem to be clear to me. I also agree that lack of money can make stress a lot. But I think a comma should be used between 'society' and 'it' in the fourth paragraph.
ReplyDeletethanks a lot!
Deletei will check and put the comma!
I really understand your hook!! I like the examples you gave in the first paragraph. I totally get it, and they intrigue me. But in the first paragraph, i think you meant 'favorite sheet' not 'favorite shit'. I also like you described money as 'piece of paper', it struck me powerful. The sentence 'Therefore they are stressed if they have less than their neighbors.' it will be better if you write 'when' instead of 'if'. i am not getting the sentence 'Especially if the relationship within family members is tied is a cause of the stress' in the fourth paragraph. I also like that you restates the thesis statement of each main paragraph. I can see the point.
ReplyDeletethanks a lot for giving comments!
ReplyDeleteI will change that parts of my paper!
Nam Alexander/5th Assignment Causes of the Stress/thursday
ReplyDeleteEveryone in our big world gets stress at least one time during the day. There can be a huge variety of reasons to get the stress; for instance spilling a coffee on the favorite shirt, being late on class, job, meeting, getting wet under the rain and so on and so on and so on. Today stress is a big issue in the big world, where everyone gets it.
The first and one of the most essential reasons to be stressed is the lack of the money. The modern system of life is based on the "piece of paper" and if you do not have it or if you have it but not enough. It for sure results the stress. According to the US school of the international studies' research, there are 40% of the people are stressed when they wake up every morning and realize how little money they have in the pocket. Therefore they are stressed when they have less than their neighbors. As we can see the lack of money is a big reason for getting stress.
Another reason to be stressed is the choice which can affect the future. The right choice can bring a lot of happiness, but the wrong choice can lead to the infinite stress till your soul goes to the heaven. The high school students are stressed of the choice of their future university and major. After entering the university they begin to be stressed by asking themselves "Is it the major which suits for me? Is it the major which I will enjoy and with help of which I will be able to earn enough?" Then the graduation comes and not only, because the choice of the company comes too. Students become stressed because of the company's atmosphere, boss's attitude and staff relationship and so on. And this consequence of the life which results stress is an infinite.
The relationship can lead to the stress too. In some cases when people want to create a new relationship in the society, it makes them sometimes do things they do not like to ( laugh at jokes they do not understand, eat food they have allergy from…) all these for sure causes stress. Especially if the relationship between family members is tied, it can lead to the stress. On the one hand they are the closest people for you in this world, but on the another hand if they do not understand your needs which leads to the misunderstanding all these can result the stress. Bad relationship can cause the stress.
So everyone has experienced the stress on his or her own skin in this big world. And there are a huge amount of reasons the stress to occur. Despite all the causes of the stress people should learn how to be peaceful in the mind because such approach will help to reduce the level of stress and the big world which is full of the stressful situations would be seen as calm and harmonic place.