Unlike the widely known common sense, that stress usually is detrimental to health of human being, the growing number of recent clinical trials has revealed that stress has some beneficial effects on human body. Many researchers claim that stress helps improving memorization capacity temporarily and better concentrating for longer time. However, despite this lastly publicized good news, stress has been still blamed for major cause of today’s various adult diseases, especially relating to mental illnesses. The causes of stress in today’s our society can be explained as following.
First, the accelerating rate of competition, mainly induced by globalization, is picked up as one of the major reasons. The advent of globalism has led to extreme and endless competition among producers all around the world, causing them to face unprecedentedly harsh reality. Not only the domestic producers and sellers, even the national service industries had to rush into this never-ending fighting, provoking worldwide nations to be chronically stressful. This new trend of cut-throat competition accompanied surging number of conflicts as well.
Secondly, modern humans’ anxiety over money, which is known as the term ‘materialism’, is another cause of stress. Indeed, the growing public trend of materialism is not new in this capitalist world. The problem with this trend, however, is that people believe money to be omnipotent and they start to destroy and ignore the most fundamental values, such as humanity and love. The worsening catastrophe has resulted in changes in contemporary people’s behaviors, letting them to pursue only for money. Therefore, all of the three groups – people who eager to earn, already possess, or failed to get money, feels stressful, and this stress will last forever unless they change their greedy mind over fortune.
Last but not the least, people of our times are often stressed out when they face continual loneliness. According to the statistics conducted by Seoul National University in 2010, over 83% of those surveyed responded that they get stress when they encounter lonely environment for prolonged period. And 75% of respondents revealed that they get additional stress by trying to avoid or escape from this unfavorable situation. Sociologists and psychologists studying these phenomena believe that people’s fear for loneliness mainly came from emerging trend of individualism and disintegrated traditional family structure, which became common these days.
The causes of stress listed on the last three paragraphs let us throw a suspicious question if we can live on the world without stress. Since we cannot bring the world back to the previous one without globalization, materialism and individualism, it seems almost impossible to find perfect escape from stress. However, we can at least try to find alternatives, less stressful life by changing the way you encounter stress. In this context, people should learn how to wisely manage his stress, rather than complain and curse this stressful world.
I found it interesting that stress can give us more memorizing capacity, thx for the info.
ReplyDeleteI want you to put the word 'us' btw led and to in this sentence, 'The advent of globalism has led to extreme and endless competition among producers all around the world',so it can be more natural.
and also, you need to fix up the sentence, 'people who eager to earn, already possess, or failed to get money, feels stressful', since it seems to me that it needs to have parallel structure.
and I think your conclusion is a bit unclear, well, most of us has the same kinda problem but yes it is..
Aight anyway, good writing overall.
Especially, I really like your phrase: "The problem with this trend, however, is that people believe money to be omnipotent and ....". You used the word "omnipontent", and it looks the very term to explain what you are going to say following paragraph. So the usage of that term was so suitable, i guess..
ReplyDeleteOverall, your second body paragraph and following paragraph including conclusion were very nicely organized,however I could not understand your 1st paragraph easily. So, 1st body paragraph would be better if it is revised a little bit for readers.
Lastly, small grammatical mistake or typo were found, for example, on the first line "Unlike the widely known common sense, that stress usually is..", "that stress" needs to be replaced by "the stress" or just "stress".
Anyways, I enjoyed your writing and your information was really interesting such as relations between stress and concentration.
Unlike the widely known common sense, that stress usually is detrimental to health of human being, the growing number of recent clinical trials has revealed that stress has some beneficial effects on human body. Many researchers claim that stress helps improving memorization capacity temporarily and better concentrating for longer time. However, despite this lastly publicized good news, stress has been still blamed for major cause of today’s various adult diseases, especially relating to mental illnesses. The causes of stress in today’s our society can be explained as following.
ReplyDeleteFirst, the accelerating rate of competition, mainly induced by globalization, is picked up as one of the major reasons. The advent of globalism has led us to extreme and endless competition among producers all around the world, causing them to face unprecedentedly harsh reality. Not only the domestic producers and sellers, even the national service industries had to rush into this never-ending fighting, provoking worldwide nations to be chronically stressful. This new trend of cut-throat competition accompanied surging number of conflicts as well.
Secondly, modern humans’ anxiety over money, which is known as the term ‘materialism’, is another cause of stress. Indeed, the growing public trend of materialism is not new in this capitalist world. The problem with this trend, however, is that people believe money to be omnipotent and they start to destroy and ignore the most fundamental values, such as humanity and love. The worsening catastrophe has resulted in changes in contemporary people’s behaviors, letting them to pursue only for money. Therefore, all of the three groups – people who eager to earn, already possess, or have failed to get money, feels stressful, and this stress will last forever unless they change their greedy mind over fortune.
Last but not the least, people of our times are often stressed out when they face continual loneliness. According to the statistics conducted by Seoul National University in 2010, over 83% of those surveyed responded that they get stress when they encounter lonely environment for prolonged period. And 75% of respondents revealed that they get additional stress by trying to avoid or escape from this unfavorable situation. Sociologists and psychologists studying these phenomena believe that people’s fear for loneliness mainly came from emerging trend of individualism and disintegrated traditional family structure, which became common these days.
The causes of stress listed on the last three paragraphs let us throw a suspicious question if we can live on the world without stress. Since we cannot bring the world back to the previous one without globalization, materialism and individualism, it seems almost impossible to find perfect escape from stress. However, we can at least try to find alternatives, less stressful life by changing the way you encounter stress. In this context, people should learn how to wisely manage his stress, rather than complain and curse this stressful world. In short, accepting and managing stress effectively would be the best answer for escaping from stress, paradoxically.