TV: could you be without it? Discuss
There are approximately 2 main reasons why people need TV, information and fun. We can get a lot of information in various fields on TV and also we can see interesting things on it. It provides these things audiovisually, which is very efficient to make people understand easily. Indeed, TV is a very comfortable tool. However, 'comfortable' doesn't mean 'necessary'. We may feel discomfort living without TV, but we still can be without it.
For the first reason, we now can get information from lots of sources including Internet. We are living in internet-based society. Most of us have 'smartphone', the super-efficient and easy tool to use Internet almost everywhere and anytime. What is even better, we can actively search for what we need rather than just sitting and staring at TV to see what's going on. TV is a one-way communication. It doesn't fit anymore. We can think of Radio, which was the main tool to give people information before, has almost disappeared. TV can be the next one.
Secondly, we easily think that we will be bored to death if there is no TV. This is because we are too accustomed to living with it. Actually, TV is an invention. People before TV, supposedly were living not that bored as we imagine. It means that we can also do. To give a specific example, there was an experiment to see what would be like if TV disappears. Some people were ordered to get rid of TV in their homes. For the first few days, they seemed they couldn't bear with that situation but they soon changed. They started to read something and have a talk with their family. Then they noticed they were not nervous even if they can't watch TV at all. It turned out to show that we can live without TV.
TV is a very important thing for us in that it gives us useful information and fun. But nowadays, there are some powerful alternatives that do the roles that TV did even more effectively. Soon TV can be the thing that people don't need. We all can see that TV is not the definitely necessary thing to live with. Living without TV, we absolutely can do it.
I think this essay is interesting, because it contains two different views on television. In the beginning, it illustrated television as an invention (yes, it really is!) and in the next paragraph, the author criticized little bit about televisions role and offer quite good example to get rid of tv. So, I think this is interesting and well organized essay.
ReplyDeleteYour essay is well structured, I think. You divided the whole text into 4 parts and gave us good reasons why we don't need TV. Well, one thing I want to point is that you used 'fun' twice. I suggest you could use 'entertainment' instead of it.
ReplyDeleteSeung Ah Lee
ReplyDeleteWell done! I enjoyed reading your essay, I wrote on the same topic and it's good to share your idea. You seem to have included some detailed examples to support your arguments. Very good! The structure of the writing was quite logical so it was easy for me to follow. One line that seemed impressive was " 'comfortable' doesn't mean 'necessary'" One thing i'd like to suggest is not to use colloquial expression like 'thing' as this is an academic writing! Good job~ ;)
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ReplyDeleteThere are approximately 2 main reasons why people need TV, information and fun. We can get a lot of information in various fields on TV and also we can see interesting things on it. It provides these things audiovisually, which is very efficient to make people understand easily. Indeed, TV is a very comfortable tool. However, 'comfortable' doesn't mean 'necessary'. We may feel discomfort living without TV, but we still can be without it.
For the first reason, we now can get information from lots of sources including Internet. We are living in an internet-based society. Most of us have 'smartphone', the super-efficient and easy tool to use Internet almost everywhere and anytime. What is even better, we can actively search for what we need rather than just sitting and staring at TV to see what's going on. TV is a one-way communication. It doesn't fit anymore. We can think of Radio, which was the main tool to give people information before, has almost disappeared. TV can be the next one.
Secondly, we easily think that we will be bored to death if there is no TV. This is because we are too accustomed to living with it. Actually, TV is an invention. People before TV, supposedly were living not that bored as we imagine. It means that we can also do. There are lots of other activities that we can do instead of watching TV such as cooking, exercising, and reading.
Also, there is an interesting proof showing us that we can live without TV. There was an experiment to see what would be like if TV disappears. Some people were ordered to get rid of TV in their homes. For the first few days, they seemed they couldn't bear with that situation but they soon changed. They started to read something and have a talk with their family. Then they noticed they were not nervous even if they can't watch TV at all. It turned out to show that we can live without TV.
TV is a very important thing for us in that it gives us useful information and entertainment. But nowadays, there are some powerful alternatives that do the roles that TV did even more effectively. Soon TV can be the thing that people don't need. We all can see that TV is not the definitely necessary thing to live with. Living without TV, we absolutely can do it.