What should a government do for a country to become successful?
How many jobs do you know related to government? We studied or are studying about these but don’t know well specifically. But, everybody knows that there are a lot of things which a government has to do.
The most important thing a government should do is taking care of their nation people. For that, one of the great methods is to strengthen the social security net. Eradicating poverty is very important. With this, a nation can make more people who have purchasing power. That also makes the circumstance good for business. As a result, eradicating poverty can be win-win strategy for both people and industry of a nation. President Luiz Inacio Lula da Silva is a good example. He did many things for the poor people and it makes Brazil economy bigger and healthier than before.
Another thing a government should do for successful country is debt management. In recent years, PIGS(Portugal, Italy, Greece and Spain), especially Greece had big difficulties in managing debt. We should let this be a good lesson to ourselves. Excessive government expenditure can be huge problem to our society. Not only government, but also it’s people should reject populism. We should pursue the right policy considering gain and loss with a long-term view.
I suggested two things. First one is eradicating poverty and second one is debt management. It can’t be fulfilled without communal spirit. People, especially government officials have to keep this in their mind.
Siho Yang
ReplyDeleteI like the conclusion because it summarizes the ideas very clearly. And I also like the expression 'win-win strategy' because it was quite appropriate to express it. And specific example of President of Brazil was good to support you idea. But I think the first sentence is not that clear. At first, I thought of 'politician..? civil servants..?' because of the word 'jobs'. How about instead 'How many works do you know the government do?' Secondly, 'social security net' doesn't really directly connect to 'eradicating poverty'. I think it'd be better if there are some sentences between them to clarify what 'social security net' is. Lastly, 'a nation can make more people who have purchasing power.' sentence. What about 'a nation can support more and more people to have purchasing power'?
Seunghyun Lee
ReplyDeleteI like your essay.
Most of all, your essay is simple and easy to understand.
I think it has everything required to be a nice essay.
Moreover, yours have specific examples.
However, i am curious why you choose "taking care of their nation people" as a thesis statement of body paragraph 1. Does it makes sens when the word "poor people" substitutes "nation people"?