You may ask yourself everyday: "Am I a happy person?". And everyone when he or she opens the eyes every morning is asking himself or herself: "What does happiness mean for me?". The common answer would be the finance power and stability. Because most of the world's population; you and me, think that the money can make us happy forever and through this "dirty" piece of papers we can get our freedom, health, respect and other artificially created things. But lets forget about this priority of happiness for a while and imagine the world without this handmade cause of happiness; by closing our eyes lets ask question to ourselves "What would be the causes of happiness if we could get everything equally for free?". And for sure, depending on the age, level of knowledge and wisdom, there are will be other much more important things which cause happiness instead of finance power. I would like to consider the layer of society which age is an average.
The first cause of the happiness is the health. To be healthy "inside" and "outside" is a very important thing for the bright and happy life. When people feel themselves good it makes them view the surroundings from the positive side that makes the whole environment feel in a positive and satisfied way. Especially people are happy when their parents or really close for them people are healthy. Because they all together are able to enjoy the beauty of the world from the healthy eyes and feel it with the mixture of the healthy bodies and souls. Physical health and mental health are very important tools for the realizing happiness.
The next cause of the happiness is the tied and friendly relationships. The relationship could be generally divided into internal relationship which means within a family and external relationship which means the relationship within friends, colleagues and society by itself.
The family relationship is the essential thing to be happy because it is like the "headquarter" where you learn the basics of the life principles and the place where you can get a really sincere advice without any hidden trick. The family is a symbol of happiness due to the reason of the support role even if you have made a big mistake; your precious family will always understand you and despite the hard challenges will help to overcome it.
But to have a good relationship in the society is very important thing for happiness too. Because the society in comparison with the family is not always accepting you as you are in real. And being suitable toward society makes people feel happy. The society is a good addition to the family with help of which you can build up your own identity and broaden your sight on the world and surrounding environment. The society and good friendship with people from the different areas do not make your life monotonous and boring, on the contrary it makes you live a life which is full of various interesting things, and therefore it makes you feel happy.
Then the creation of the system where everyone is equal and live a plentiful life without needs, such as struggling with poverty because of the big selfish organizations which block people to be happy, would be the one of the elements toward happiness. The earth has enough resources and the modern society has enough technology to get rid of the "dirty" piece of paper system. The only step has to be done toward happiness is to forget about selfish interests and willingness to cooperate and share the knowledge and resources without pursuing individual profit and benefit.
So after opening eyes, I hope you can clearly see that the financial power and stability is not the only instruments in our life to be a happy person. As it was mentioned above there are plenty of things are much more important than the "dirty" piece of papers and the list is bigger than it was told. The only step should be done is the realization by everyone and the "real" cooperation without pursuing only the individual interests and benefit. For sure, everyone can be HAPPY, but not with the system we live in today.
To Alex from ShinHye Lee
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is fresh expression. I like your phrases and expression.
2. Your main point seems to be clear
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
“…this handmade cause of happiness” phrase is really awesome. I like this expression because it is not an old fashion one to describe “money”.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved;
“And everyone when he or she opens the eyes every morning is asking himself or herself~”
I think this sentence needs to be changed like “And everyone who opens the eyes every morning is asking himself or herself~…something like that.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is
:I recommend you to use thesis statement on introduction paragraph. It would make your essay more logic.