Before deciding to hold Mr.HUFS, we need to gather people who have the will to be a part of this long and harsh sailing. About 10-11 weeks ahead, the captain of the Fitness circle calls all the members on to teach them how to be on a diet, investigate how much they weigh and how much kilos they want to lose. If there are enough members, about 20, to do the project, we decide to hold the contest and separate the participants by the weight limits, -65kg, -70kg, and -75kg are which. Each weight would have 6-8 competitors.
After gathering and separating the builders, we are to be on a diet. The diet is a whole different thing from what common people do to lose their weight. The meals we have consist of chicken breast, sweet potato and a bit of colorful vegetables. Nobody can eat anything else during this preparing period. A certain amount of protein, carbohydrate and vitamin should be ingested 4 times a day at the exact time. The exercise begins after having the 2nd or 3rd meal. The exercise we do must include weight training to achieve the muscles' definition and running to burn the fat the body has. Exercise can be done 5 times or more than that depending on the individual. All the members should keep this routine for approximately 10 weeks.
Then we are ready for the show. One day before the day of the contest, we paint our body with an artificial tanning paint and measure our weight once again. All the contestants practice their body poses to get the optimum muscle display. They also prepare for their free performance shown for about 1 minute and 30 seconds. Right before the competition on the very day, the participants help each other to pump all the body muscles up. Then they pose in front of the spectators and judges. Each one can get big applause and people's cheer no matter how good or bad they did. The one who is given the most point wins for each level, getting a trophy. It's the time of Mr.HUFS's birth.
It takes much effort to keep the food away you want and stand the hunger you confront because it's one of the 3 natural instincts. Yes, whether they got a good result or not, the competitors deal with the evil inside that tells them to do this no more and eat more. I therefore say that all of them deserve to be Mr.HUFS, for all the perseverance they demonstrated.
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ReplyDeleteTo_Alex_________ From ____Seongyool, Myung___ Assignment _How to prepare for Mr.Hufs________
1. What I like about this piece of writing is __it has a good logical structure, and precise explanation of the traning process.
2. Your main point seems to be _clear and easy to understand.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
Words or lines I like them because
___ _carbohydrate makes me feel, that the author really knows about that area
Ingest _ because it is sounds more literate
“The meals … vegetables.” It is unimaginable difficult to maintain a such diet.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved (meaning not clear, supporting points missing, order seems mixed up, writing not lively):
Lines or parts Need improving because
___we are to be on a diet_ ________may be – we should be on or we have to
____training to achieve the muscles_ may be - to get or accumulate_____
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is I l liked this essay. It is written in a good and understandable way. Except only a small parts which could be a lack of my language skills. The best improvement could be the changing some word expressions into another, which are a little bit more clear. But it is good in general.
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ReplyDeleteTo_Seongyool, Myung_________ From ____Alex___ Assignment _How to prepare for Mr.Hufs________
1. What I like about this piece of writing is __it has a good logical structure, and precise explanation of the traning process.
2. Your main point seems to be _clear and easy to understand.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
Words or lines I like them because
___ _carbohydrate makes me feel, that the author really knows about that area
Ingest _ because it is sounds more literate
“The meals … vegetables.” It is unimaginable difficult to maintain a such diet.
4. Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved (meaning not clear, supporting points missing, order seems mixed up, writing not lively):
Lines or parts Need improving because
___we are to be on a diet_ ________may be – we should be on or we have to
____training to achieve the muscles_ may be - to get or accumulate_____
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is I l liked this essay. It is written in a good and understandable way. Except only a small parts which could be a lack of my language skills. The best improvement could be the changing some word expressions into another, which are a little bit more clear. But it is good in general.
Cho, Hyun
ReplyDeleteYour Essay shows fine explanation on steps of the process in sequential order and use clear and easy sentences that help better understanding of the writing. Above all, what I like the most about your essay is that your unique subject, 'Mr.HUFS'. Your approach to transform previous topic, 'preparing a part in a play' into 'preparing for Mr.HUFS'struck me as powerful. For these reasons, I like your writing.
Have you ever heard of a bodybuilding competition in your school? Well, there is one called Mr.HUFS which will be held in May this year. This is the 15th time and about 20 participants will compete with their body shape after making so much effort for it. Since I'm one of the competitors too, I'd like to have an opportunity of informing you about this game.
ReplyDeleteBefore deciding to hold Mr.HUFS, we need to gather people who have the will to be a part of this long and harsh sailing. About 10-11 weeks ahead, the leader of the Fitness circle calls all the members on to teach them how to be on a diet, investigate how much they weigh and how much kilos they want to lose. If there are enough members, about 20, to do the project, we decide to hold the contest and separate the participants by the weight limits, -65kg, -70kg, and -75kg are which. Each weight would have 6-8 competitors.
After gathering and separating the builders, we should be on a diet. The diet is a whole different thing from what common people do to lose their weight. The meals we have consist of chicken breast, sweet potato and a bit of colorful vegetables. Nobody can eat anything else during this preparing period. A certain amount of protein, carbohydrate and vitamin should be ingested 4 times a day at the exact time. The exercise begins after having the 2nd or 3rd meal. The exercise must include weight-training to achieve the muscles' definition and running to burn the bodyfat. Exercise can be done 5 times a week or more than that depending on the individual. All the members should keep this routine for approximately 10 weeks.
Then we are ready for the show. One day before the day of the contest, we paint our body with an artificial tanning paint and measure our weight once again. All the contestants practice their body poses to get the optimum muscle display. They also prepare for their free performance shown for about 1 minute and 30 seconds. Then right before the competition on the very day, the participants help each other to pump all the body muscles up. Then they pose in front of the spectators and judges. Each one can get big applause and people's cheer no matter how good or bad they did. The one who is given the most point wins for each level, getting a trophy. It's the time of Mr.HUFS's birth.
It takes much effort to keep the food away you want and stand the hunger you confront because it's one of the 3 natural instincts. Of course, doing more exercise makes them even more exhausted. Yes, whether they got a good result or not, the competitors deal with the evil inside that tells them to do this no more and eat more. And they overcome that. I therefore say that all of them deserve to be Mr.HUFS, for all the perseverance they demonstrated.