words mean "festival." Every year, lots of festivals are held in the
world. Korea, however, has the very special festivals which are held
in every spring: university campus festivals. Most universities in the
world have their own festivals each year, but our campus festival
culture is something else in terms of its background history, scale,
and cultural meaning.
When freshmen start college life, many seniors say that campus
festival is "the flower" of your college life, which means campus
festival can satisfy students who had dreamed some fantasy of campus
lives. Before introducing campus festivals in Korea, it is necessary
to think about why those kinds of festivals are considered so
important during undergraduate years in Korea.
At first, Korea has a different university entrance structure, which
means not the systemic structure but social structure. As President
Obama had mentioned before, most of us and pretty much the neighboring
countries in Asia know that the enthusiasm for education in Korea is
really high. In other word, the passion on education is so great that
it is thought to be excessive. For this reason, after finishing three
years of high school life, and harsh university entrance exam, many
students who got college entrance "pass" deserve to feel the freedom
of their college lives. So, the college festival means the first
official emancipation for students, especially for freshmen.
Because of that special trait that Korean campus festivals have, most
students are welcomed to do everything they wanted, and dreamed. Some
universities hold small rock festival during the festival period, and
each university and department has typical characteristic. For
example, my school, HUFS utilizes its multi-cultural benefits, so each
department prepares traditional customs and food for introducing
countries' culture where their major languages belong to. Then,
students and many visitors can experience various countries' cultures
during the campus festival. Furthermore, many pop singers visit campus
to celebrate their festivals.
Lastly, we cannot explain Korean campus festivals without mentioning
alcohol. Most students drink and enjoy their festivals, even students
who rarely drink alcohol. In the night, we are able to feel the climax
of festival, and each department holds its own bar by selling
traditional food and alcohol. At that time, it is good time for
professors to gather with students and communicate each other.
Campus festivals in Korea are considered as very crucial rite of
passage in many ways. As I mentioned above, festivals can be the
emancipation for freshmen, and the best way to express students'
stress on studies. Also, it can be the opportunity for students to get
closer with their professors. However, many students are wondering
that these festivals are fading away because most of students in these
days have no interest in festivals that are not helpful for their
future career. Because of this desolate atmosphere, campus festivals
are losing their own features: fun.
First of all, the hook makes an interesting to me. And I think it`s a good expression regarding a freshman as a 'flower'. And quotation of Obama`s mention also great. But in conclusion, a sentence explaining disregarded festival may make two statements in the conclusion. I think it makes readers confusing about your thesis.
ReplyDeleteNam Alex
ReplyDeleteThe beginning is very interesting. Because it was expressed in various languages. It makes feel me like it is an international essay.
Yes. The thesis statement identifies the process. "but our campus festival
culture is something else in terms of its background history, scale,
and cultural meaning."
For sure this essay has a background. We can express the word "festival" in different languages, but it will mean the same meaning for everyone and Korea has its own festivals.
It presents a different part of the process. It has a logical process which are different entrance system, freedom in actions, alcohol.
It has a lot of examples which supports. I think you are totally right about this holiday and all details are sufficient.
From my personal point the conclusion could be as a evaluation and warning, because the author says at first half what students can get from it and the last part the warning about students who are not interested in such festivals.
Do you know what fiesta, 축제, 狂欢节, or フェスティバル mean? Yes, all of those words mean "festival." Every year, lots of festivals are held in the world. Korea, however, has the very special festivals which are held in every spring: university campus festivals. Most universities in the
ReplyDeleteworld have their own festivals each year, but our campus festival culture is something else in terms of its background history, special trait, and unification.
When freshmen start the college life, many seniors say that campus festival is "the flower" of your college life, which means campus festival can satisfy students who had dreamed some fantasy of campus lives. Before introducing campus festivals in Korea, it is necessary to think about why those kinds of festivals are considered so important during undergraduate years in Korea.
At first, Korea has a different university entrance structure, which means not the systemic structure but the social structure. As President Obama had mentioned before, most of us and pretty much the neighboring countries in Asia know that the enthusiasm for education in Korea is really high. In other word, the passion on education is so great that it is thought to be excessive. For this reason, after finishing three years of high school life, and harsh university entrance exam, many students who got college entrance "pass" deserve to feel the freedom of their college lives. So, the college festival means the first official emancipation for students, especially for freshmen.
Because of that special trait that Korean campus festivals have, most students are welcomed to do everything they wanted, and dreamed. Some universities hold a small rock festival during the festival period, and each university and department have their typical characteristic. For example, my school, HUFS utilizes its multi-cultural benefits, so each department prepares its own traditional customs and foods for introducing countries' culture where their major languages belong to. Then, students and many visitors can experience various countries' cultures during the campus festival. Furthermore, many pop singers visit campus to celebrate their festivals.
Lastly, we cannot explain Korean campus festivals without mentioning alcohol. Most students drink and enjoy their festivals, even students who rarely drink alcohol. In the night, we are able to feel the climax of festival, and each department holds its own bar by selling traditional food and alcohol. At that time, it is good time for professors to gather with students and communicate each other. At this time, students and professor can talk about their opinion and communicate freely, which is the very tool for unification.
Campus festivals in Korea are considered as very crucial rite of passage in many ways. As I mentioned above, festivals can be the mancipation for freshmen, and the best way to express students' emotions placed under restraint. Also, it can be the opportunity for students to get closer with their professors and make broad relationships. However, many students are worrying about these festivals are fading away because most of students in these days have no interest in festivals that are not helpful for their future careers. Because of this desolate atmosphere, campus festivals are losing their own features: fun. University students need to think of the most important thing in their college lives except for studies.